Today we will be showing your what we have been doing in Term 2 for writing. This term we have been learning how to write a strong narrative. A strong narrative is believable, descriptive and consistent. We can describe the setting and the characters.
Today we did Sick Sentences. We changed boring sentences into strong descriptive sentences.
Here is one of the boring sentences:
Anna sat down.
Here our changed descriptive sentence:
Anna sat down on her knees on the cold, uncomfortable concrete floor.
We have also been writing a story this week about a girl called Anna. Here is the picture we used.
Some of us started stories and would like to share our favourite paragrphs.
Here is a paragraph from Eddie's story:
Anna was in a weird place when she put her finger on the clean, smooth glass but she was in the middle of nowhere but she could feel something burning beside her. After awhile she could smell smoke and wood burning, she found out that she was in a day dream but couldn't exit.
Here is a paragraph from Divine's writing:
Chapter 2 The New Scary World!
As Anna was in a new world everything in the new world was the opposite of the world Anna lived in before. The rich were poor and the good were evil. Everything there was BAD.
This is Isaac's story:
She got sucked into the mirror and on the other side there was an old deserted house.She had not looked at the rooms but next to her she could see the mirror she tried to get back in but it would not let her so she had a little look around the house. She found the door but it was not only a deserted house or deserted town. she said to her maybe there's another mirror in one of these houses. So she looked in every old house but the big mansion. She looked in the rooms and the basement. In the basement there was the mirror. She touched the mirror and then it made the ripples and then it sucked her back into the normal world.
Thank you so much for coming and visiting our blog. Did you like our stories? Was it entertaining?
Please comment below with your thoughts.
Well done room 9 for some very interesting stories.I have just finished commenting on all your blogs.I was AMAZED by some of the strong words you have included.Some of your stories gave me an image in my head and I felt like I was in the story.
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ReplyDeleteKia ora, My name is Summer I go to Awapuni school I have seen your class blog that you have done. It's really interesting How you have been practising some of your writing in your class, i like how you told us about boring words and changing them into stronger words to make the Reader paint picture in their mind, I also really like how you have added a picture to show what you're writing was about .Next time you could probably put it in a slide or a doc so we can read it a bit more clearly, because it's just all over the place. Another thing you can probably work on is to update your blog because we don't know where your bouts your school is.
Thank you Summer
Greetings my name is Isobel I go to awapuni school in Gisborne. I like your writing. My favorite part was how it made me remember a time I was reading a book. It was spooky and cool at the same time like the story you guys have written. There is no fault that I can find with your stories but I have to suggest that you please update your blog so it says where you are. your sincerely Isobel.
ReplyDeleteKia ora I am Ngahuia from Ruapotaka school.I really like the way you write your narrative about a girl Anna.My favorite paragraph was from Eddie.What was your classes favorite paragraph?.
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